my first Song post (west coast bangga)

[soundboy]

This is my first profeesional post in this clinic. Any critique would be welcomed

http://www.soundclick.com/util/strea...ID=946339&q=Hi

http://www.soundclick.com/util/strea...ID=946339&q=Lo

[mallcore pop]

I listened to Four, cool groove, but I'd cut the first 10 seconds of the intro.

The distorted part of the bassline is a little dry for my taste, maybe try an ambient program, like a really subtle reverb or delay, just to spread it out a little.

I wasn't feelin' the kick, it was getting lost in the mix. You could layer another one (a grittier or more defined one) and still keep the low end of the first.

Well done!!

[ignition]

Ok, I will not admit how long I listened to this before noticing what the voice was saying in the background, and realizing that it's not part of the song lol

I agree with mallcore that the intro might be a little long, but other than that, it sounds good to me. I listened to a few of your other songs on the site, and this (Four) was (IMO) the best one that I listened to.

Thanks for sharing!

travis