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Old 12-12-2003
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Your Game

Here is a light rocker I am working on.

Your Game

[Verse I]
Just leave the light on baby
You know it won't be seen
Just keep the torches burnin'
I'll tell you if it's me

[Chorus I]
Seasons change, but I remain
All in all it seems the same
And I'm the only one in your game


[Verse II]
Surrender your causes baby
Because they can't be won
Succumb to temptation baby
Or else you'll be just one(or alone??)

[Chorus I]
Seasons change, but I remain
All in all it seems the same
And, I'm the only one in your game

BREAK

[Chorus II]
Why deny, to you and I
All in all it seems a sin
And you're the only one who can win

[Verse I (reprise)]
Just leave the light on baby
You know it won't be seen
Just keep the torches burnin'
I'll tell you if it's me

[Chorus I]
Seasons change, but I remain
All in all it seems the same
And, I'm the only one in your game


All in all it's just a shame
If you don't stop, I'll go insane
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Old 12-16-2003
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Re: Your Game

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Originally posted by rguagenti

[Verse II]
Surrender your causes baby
Because they can't be won
Succumb to temptation baby
Or else you'll be just one(or alone??)


I'd change it to;

Don't leave yourself undone

or

Don't leave me undone

Something like that...I don't care for the line thats there.

[Chorus II]
Why deny, to you and I
All in all it seems a sin
And you're the only one who can win

...

All in all it's just a shame
If you don't stop, I'll go insane
These strike me all wrong...seem contrived and out of place (the chorus II, not the lyric as a whole heheh [edit])

I'd love to hear this to music...

Nice piece!
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Old 12-17-2003
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Thanx fat.

I appreciate the read and your comments.
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