New lyrics (tell me what you think).

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Originally Posted by JonahPavesco

I don't understand how people come up with lyrics that sound like they were written by a freshman in high school and post them online obviously assuming at least SOME good could come out of it. Unfortunately, you actually got some decent comments, which just goes to say that some people like kissing ass purely for sport. Strange. I mean I understand if you're in high school, so that's you're immediate surrounding, but why surround yourself with people and situations that hold you back?

I haven't been on this forum for a long time, so I don't know if there's been an upspike in degenerate behavior. Or maybe you're legitimate. Or at least you think you are. If this isn't a joke and this is something you're interested in you need to step it up.

And I'm not even knocking you for writing it drunk. I write drunk when the mood strikes. Hemmingway was an alcoholic, Jack London was as well. But I'm not sure we're looking at the next Ernest or London. However, I'll say this. If there is a fiber in your body of what you believe to be poetic/lyrical/musical talent, whatever, then you MUST see that changes have to be made. But see, here, I don't know you. I don't know your past, your tendency's. You could have just been bored out of your mind, found some forum and posted some arbitrary notebook scribblings you found in your 2nd grader's backpack. I mean, come on, killing teachers, detentions...those aren't lyrics. Those are early warning signs for a degenerate outcast, desperate for attention by being wacky and writing "CRAZY" funny crap about killing teachers and thinkings they're hot.

*Note: I must admit there's no mention of killing teachers, I don't think. I just can't get through the whole thing. It's a pathetic piece of writing and if you had any interest in writing you' be asking questions and not posting things you write while you were drunk and obviously so incredibly still suffering with immaturity.

There's no SING of mister Larson? By Golly, Jimminy Crickers, best give Larson a SING that he can SONG and through the streets he can go about sunging the sang!

Those are early warning signs for a degenerate outcast... yes.