Slave to a Bottle of Broken Dreams

Audiowriter

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Just wanting to get some ideas for adding to this rough draft (and rough mix) of a new tune I'm working on. I don't know if the title has been used befor or not - I googled it and didn't see anything exact? I also know the song calls for better lyrics / vocals - but I'm trying to get the basic flow of the song structure itself down. Right now it's only 2 minutes long - but I'm not sure of what to add.
Any suggestions are appreciated!

w w w.customaudioproductions.com/BottleBrokenDreams.mp3

Audiowriter
 
Is it about booze? - I will give it a listen when I get a chance - can you post lyrics
 
Chat for another three posts and then post a real link.

Your title sounds like a line in a Tom Waits song...
 
Your title sounds like a line in a Tom Waits song...

Whereas the song sounds nothing like it was written by Waits.

This may be just me, but the title promised much more than the song delivers. I agree with you- the lyrics need work. I was expecting some seriously good song writing. If you care to hear it, my suggestion is scrap the whole thing except the title, and start over again. I must admit, the song style is just not to my liking, and that is influencing my opinion.

But I just don't like it.
 
Okay it's a metal song - I was expecting a country song based on the title. The background music/writing is good but the vocals are "wince" taking away from the song. The lyrics work okay but the delivery is just so so. I think it has potential so keep working on the vocals....
 
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