witm8
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EDIT 05-April-2017: Nothing happening here anymore - song completed and moved on to something else https://soundcloud.com/tim-summers/picture-with-you
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I’ve hit a wall, and need an extra verse (and possibly a middle verse that I’m not happy with either) if anyone out there fancies a challenge hey
This is what I have got so far, and I’ve grabbed a guitar and mic so you get the really basic idea for how the song is intending to sound (will pad out loads more obviously).
This verse is staying as I’m more than happy with it:
Playing with fire, how I lost my soul
Just being used, like a dirty ‘ole hole
A model of travesty, falling through gravity
I try to get a grip, but slip on insanity
It’s part of the game, no one hears me and never wants to see me again
There’s nothing I can do, now I realise I am a picture with you
This I’m not overly keen on:
I said I loved you, Under the statue
Of the soldier, on horseback
That’s where I told ya, we’d be together, forever
It’s part of the game, but no one hears me and never wants to see me again
There’s nothing I can do, now I realise I am a picture with you
We’ve also got this as an option somewhere:
My body is crippled with anguish and hate
And I don’t want to seal your fate
I know you have been through a lot as well
But being apart is a living hell
It’s part of the game, no one hears me and never wants to see me again
There’s nothing I can do, now I realise I am a picture with you
And also possibly this:
Fake memories were taking hold
With all of these lies we are being told
I shouldn’t win, but we wouldn’t loose
I tried to find some other way, but couldn’t choose
It’s part of the game, no one hears me and never wants to see me again
There’s nothing I can do, now I realise I am a picture with you
I’m trying a different way of writing a song this time – not that I’ve had much/any experience. I don’t actually technically want a chorus – my ‘chorus’ I just want to tag onto the end of each verse (it’s part of the game, but no one hears me etc…….)
I will put a guitar break in there somewhere – harmony on my ‘chorus’. Maybe some strings in the background – you know, just try and jazz things up a bit. Then do all the mixing. This soundcloud song is really just in the really really early ideas stage.
Ideas / thoughts ?? and thanks in advance
EDIT 05-April-2017: Nothing happening here anymore - song completed and moved on to something else https://soundcloud.com/tim-summers/picture-with-you
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I’ve hit a wall, and need an extra verse (and possibly a middle verse that I’m not happy with either) if anyone out there fancies a challenge hey
This is what I have got so far, and I’ve grabbed a guitar and mic so you get the really basic idea for how the song is intending to sound (will pad out loads more obviously).
This verse is staying as I’m more than happy with it:
Playing with fire, how I lost my soul
Just being used, like a dirty ‘ole hole
A model of travesty, falling through gravity
I try to get a grip, but slip on insanity
It’s part of the game, no one hears me and never wants to see me again
There’s nothing I can do, now I realise I am a picture with you
This I’m not overly keen on:
I said I loved you, Under the statue
Of the soldier, on horseback
That’s where I told ya, we’d be together, forever
It’s part of the game, but no one hears me and never wants to see me again
There’s nothing I can do, now I realise I am a picture with you
We’ve also got this as an option somewhere:
My body is crippled with anguish and hate
And I don’t want to seal your fate
I know you have been through a lot as well
But being apart is a living hell
It’s part of the game, no one hears me and never wants to see me again
There’s nothing I can do, now I realise I am a picture with you
And also possibly this:
Fake memories were taking hold
With all of these lies we are being told
I shouldn’t win, but we wouldn’t loose
I tried to find some other way, but couldn’t choose
It’s part of the game, no one hears me and never wants to see me again
There’s nothing I can do, now I realise I am a picture with you
I’m trying a different way of writing a song this time – not that I’ve had much/any experience. I don’t actually technically want a chorus – my ‘chorus’ I just want to tag onto the end of each verse (it’s part of the game, but no one hears me etc…….)
I will put a guitar break in there somewhere – harmony on my ‘chorus’. Maybe some strings in the background – you know, just try and jazz things up a bit. Then do all the mixing. This soundcloud song is really just in the really really early ideas stage.
Ideas / thoughts ?? and thanks in advance
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