Need lyrics

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Hi.

Dont know if this is the right forum or if my request is inappropriate, but I was wondering if anybody was up for making some lyrics for my song.
I get a kind of "halleluja" or "u raise me up"ish feeling for the song, but the choice is yours.

The song is just in a early stage, and by no means finished, in terms of instruments and backing vocals/production.

2 versions, 1: I just sing some random words, 2: without my voice.

https://app.box.com/s/btcf9g7xmh93d76c80147zibd5uhsp7d

sorry for any bad english typing as norwegian is my native language

best regards
-einar høiland-
 
Hi mate...I'll be happy to help....Got some time on Sunday to work on it....Can't promise you'll like my lyrical style but I'll do what I can :)
 
Hey pal

So I got up this morning and put pen to paper. It might not be where you felt this song might go so feel free not to use them if they don't sit right. I enjoyed the process anyhow :)

To help get the rhythm I have recorded myself (BADLY) singing it here

https://soundcloud.com/user-41129754/home-record-forum

(Timing went a bit whiffy, as well as my tunings but it helps give an idea)

So here it is (edited since the recording):

I was tired and broken and would have left this world behind me
If I knew for sure that I’d hold you again
Feeling crushed; I’d loved and lost
How do I move on?
Oh, how I needed you then.

You told me that I would fill my heart with sorrow
You begged me to try and love somebody new
The years rolled by, I moved on with life
I learnt to love again
But I still need you now.

Love transcends through flesh and bone
I still feel your love burn within my soul
Some body loved is never truly gone
‘cause in our hearts, you live on

Braver than brave; your last words when you were bound
To slip away into the night was to tell me that it’s going to be all right
You said ‘Hey, it’s going to be OK’

Then you held me for the final time
Ya squeezed me and to where your life begun
You said, ‘I love you mum’.


All the best
Darren
 
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Hey pal

So I got up this morning and put pen to paper. It might not be where you felt this song might go so feel free not to use them if they don't sit right. I enjoyed the process anyhow :)

To help get the rhythm I have recorded myself (BADLY) singing it here

https://soundcloud.com/user-41129754/home-record-forum

(Timing went a bit whiffy, as well as my tunings but it helps give an idea)

So here it is (edited since the recording):

I was tired and broken and would have left this world behind me
If I knew for sure that I’d hold you again
Feeling crushed; I’d loved and lost
How do I move on?
Oh, how I needed you then.

You told me that I would fill my heart with sorrow
You begged me to try and love somebody new
The years rolled by, I moved on with life
I learnt to love again
But I still need you now.

Love transcends through flesh and bone
I still feel your love burn within my soul
Some body loved is never truly gone
‘cause in our hearts, you live on

Braver than brave; your last words when you were bound
To slip away into the night was to tell me that it’s going to be all right
You said ‘Hey, it’s going to be OK’

Then you held me for the final time
You squeezed me and to where your life begun
You said, ‘I love you mum’.


All the best
Darren

Hi.

Thank you. I will give this a go. I think Im gonna change some of the rhythm of the world to fit better, but it will be fun.

Best regards
-einar-
Ps: will sent u a copy when im done with the song.
 
You're welcome. Hope it works and look forward to hearing it...and feel free to change it as you will....or scrap it altogether :P

All the best mate

Darren

P.s I changed some of the words myself since I recorded it ;)
 
Hi.
Iv tryed the lyrics now for a while and im having a hard time to make it fit. Its simply to many words here and there. I have to rush it. Also, the the lyrics wasn't quite what i was looking for. Dont take it the wrong way, it was just what I would have made(on my best day). I was hoping for a more "advanced"? lyrics. Anyway, many thanks for the effort. Much appreciated.

best regards
-einar-
 
Hi einar

That's no problem at all ...I did really enjoy the process but appreciate that it's not what you were looking for. I wish you all the best though pal and look forward to hearing the finished song when it is ready

Thank you for the feedback

Regards
Darren
 
Hi,

I would like to give it a go as well. I am going to download the tune to my phone and ride around with it in my car for a couple of days. I will reply back with something. I really like the music and think I can work with it.

Musicturtle
 
Hi,

I would like to give it a go as well. I am going to download the tune to my phone and ride around with it in my car for a couple of days. I will reply back with something. I really like the music and think I can work with it.

Musicturtle

Hi.

Cool. In lack of response I made a text myself. Its not good, barely okay, so if yours better, i'll easily switch :-)

-einar-
 
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ln every heart, there’s something that can be awaken
And when it starts, it’s impossible to not be taken
Across the room a passing gaze
And a crowd of people just fade away
That’s when love is real.

When you find a strength
You’ve never found before
And you want more of every moment you can steal.
When you see beauty in the plain
And something new about every day
That’s when love is real.

There will be times when it’s hard to carry on
There will be nights when it feels like all is lost
Then a light will shine to help you rise above
To see the dawn and point you home

So many roads can lead you astray
So many mountains can stand in your way
But love can be your guide
And lead you to the other side

Joy and pain
And laughter through rain
A journey that says that you’ve been alive

When your heart just understands
Things that words just never can explain
That’s when love is real.
That’s when love is real.

Let me know what you think.

---------- Update ----------

https://soundcloud.com/user-200801229/when-love-is-real

Rough vocal
 
Hi.
It looks interesting. I hear you have changed the melody a bit, also interesting :-). I like your voice. A bit off here and there, but nothing that cant be fixed. im wondering if the song isn`t better of you singing it ;-)

I will give it some work, and see if it suits my vocal(range)

Thanks.

-einar-
 
Cool. I am interested in listening to what you come up with. I hope I didn't offend you by changing the melody some. Use what you wish. I just like the creative process.
 
ln every heart, there’s something that can be awaken
And when it starts, it’s impossible to not be taken
Across the room a passing gaze
And a crowd of people just fade away
That’s when love is real.

When you find a strength
You’ve never found before
And you want more of every moment you can steal.
When you see beauty in the plain
And something new about every day
That’s when love is real.

There will be times when it’s hard to carry on
There will be nights when it feels like all is lost
Then a light will shine to help you rise above
To see the dawn and point you home

So many roads can lead you astray
So many mountains can stand in your way
But love can be your guide
And lead you to the other side

Joy and pain
And laughter through rain
A journey that says that you’ve been alive

When your heart just understands
Things that words just never can explain
That’s when love is real.
That’s when love is real.

Let me know what you think.

---------- Update ----------

https://soundcloud.com/user-200801229/when-love-is-real

Rough vocal

Nice lyrics mate and beautifully sung! You've got a good powerful voice....and the words flow really well :) nice work!! Darren
 
ln every heart, there’s something that can be awaken
And when it starts, it’s impossible to not be taken
Across the room a passing gaze
And a crowd of people just fade away
That’s when love is real.

When you find a strength
You’ve never found before
And you want more of every moment you can steal.
When you see beauty in the plain
And something new about every day
That’s when love is real.

There will be times when it’s hard to carry on
There will be nights when it feels like all is lost
Then a light will shine to help you rise above
To see the dawn and point you home

So many roads can lead you astray
So many mountains can stand in your way
But love can be your guide
And lead you to the other side

Joy and pain
And laughter through rain
A journey that says that you’ve been alive

When your heart just understands
Things that words just never can explain
That’s when love is real.
That’s when love is real.

Let me know what you think.

---------- Update ----------

https://soundcloud.com/user-200801229/when-love-is-real

Rough vocal


Hi.

I did have a good try on your lyrics last knight, but it was out of my range. The high notes are just to high for my voice. Pity, cause I liked the version, and especially your voice. Its suits the song well. Pls feel free to use it as one of yours(just credit me the song). Do you have Melodyne..? it could need some small fixing to be just perfect:-)
Anyway, heres the version Im going for : https://soundcloud.com/einar-h-iland/calling-you-rough-mix-mp3

Many thanks for the effort, it was fun :-)

Best regards
-einar-
Ps: there will be much more working with this version, just a quick first take mix.
 
Hi.

I did have a good try on your lyrics last knight, but it was out of my range. The high notes are just to high for my voice. Pity, cause I liked the version, and especially your voice. Its suits the song well. Pls feel free to use it as one of yours(just credit me the song). Do you have Melodyne..? it could need some small fixing to be just perfect:-)
Anyway, heres the version Im going for : https://soundcloud.com/einar-h-iland/calling-you-rough-mix-mp3

Many thanks for the effort, it was fun :-)

Best regards
-einar-
Ps: there will be much more working with this version, just a quick first take mix.

Einar,

I like your version as well. You have a gravel to your voice I wish I had. Thanks for sharing, I will probably record and post with a real vocal. I have never used auto-tune programs but I will fix the pitch problems. My recording I did on my lunch break just to give you an example. Thanks for trying and I look forward to hearing your finished version. I may add a little guitar and such to the track if you don't mind.

Regards,
Tony
 
Einar,

I like your version as well. You have a gravel to your voice I wish I had. Thanks for sharing, I will probably record and post with a real vocal. I have never used auto-tune programs but I will fix the pitch problems. My recording I did on my lunch break just to give you an example. Thanks for trying and I look forward to hearing your finished version. I may add a little guitar and such to the track if you don't mind.

Regards,
Tony


Hi.
Thanks. Feel free to do what ever you want :-). Just share it(in this tread,pls), when your done :-)
BTW: I`m not completely done with your lyrics. I liked yours better. I`m exploring ways to sing it, without the high pitch.....

Looking forward to hear your version. And PS: if u want, I can do an effort in correcting smaller issues in Melodyne, if u sent me the voice track, when u done recording. Just an offer :-)

Best regards
-einar-
 
Hi.
Thanks. Feel free to do what ever you want :-). Just share it(in this tread,pls), when your done :-)
BTW: I`m not completely done with your lyrics. I liked yours better. I`m exploring ways to sing it, without the high pitch.....

Looking forward to hear your version. And PS: if u want, I can do an effort in correcting smaller issues in Melodyne, if u sent me the voice track, when u done recording. Just an offer :-)

Best regards
-einar-

Einar,

Sounds good. Edit the lyrics anyway you want if it helps. I may take you up on your offer :-)

Tony
 
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