You have a good voice. You started to lose me with all the effects on the vocals--the obvious pitch shifting especially. I liked the understated arrangement and the fact that you left the dynamics more or less intact rather than compressing it to death and then boosting everything. I think you might work on stronger hooks. A minute after the song ended, I'd pretty much forgotten how it went. Something should stick in my mind and make me want to listen again.
It isn't bad. Just seems to me that you are trying to sound like everything you are hearing in contemporary R&B, where oversinging, pitch shifting, and keyboard-driven arrangements with few if any real instruments are the norm. I'd so much rather listen to you finding your own voice and style.
That's all I've got.