AaronChapman
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If you were sitting in front of me with your guitar I would be looking for a subtle vocal relief of monotony. High notes with angst to mix it up & break the somber tone. I was singing the melody I would put in (at least the first note) & you went there on your little musical interlude is where it was (1:33).....This is the Chorus you need
I was singing something like this repeat 2X (dummy words) This should be your title phrase too.
"And Tiiiiiiiiiiiii-----mmme doesn't change a-thing....
Tiiiiiiiiiiiii-----mmme doesn't change a-thing.....
Now....with that being said all I did was sing the same melody with your title & it fits like a glove....
Thoughtsssss (of a) quie--t mannnnn........
Thoughtsssss (of a) quie--t mannnnn........
I would incorporate that as a Chorus/hook after each verse as it it catchy and gives much needed change to the mood of song...
And you can end the tune with it too....
Thanks for listening . It seems like most people agree some kind of vocal relief is required. I like your suggestions, Steve . I'll try a few things.
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Thanks, I appreciate it
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