Right Thing

jonlint

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Hi,

Rebooted a dormant song from 3 years ago. I’m a better song writer, arranger, mixer and musician now, so I decided to have another go at it. Plus, I wanted to really play the solo instead of using Shredder 2!
Feedback welcome:

Right Thing v1 by Jonathan Linton 4 | Free Listening on SoundCloud

JONATHAN LINTON – THE RIGHT THING
(Words by Jonathan Linton, Music by Jonathan Linton)

Circumstance is so unkind
The wrong place at the right time
You know it all, you’re intertwined
A moral decision consumes your mind
Those that know, got you in their sight
No escape from the helpless plight
Angel on the left shoulder, devil on right
Damned if you’re wrong, damned if you’re right

Good deeds didn’t prepare you for this
Innocence gone, give it one last kiss
The righteous path won’t pull you though
Sometimes the right thing’s the wrong thing to do
The dark side it sucks you in
Innocence lost, the ultimate sin
The path of light won’t pull you though
Sometimes the right thing’s the wrong thing to do

Sometimes the right thing’s the wrong thing to do
Sometimes the right thing’s the wrong thing to do

High in their pulpit they preach to us
Holier then thou, in their words we trust
And then they’re caught in a boyish lust
Hushed by the leaders, it’s so unjust
How can they judge, how can they condemn
Self preservation’s built in all men
They’d do the same if it happened to them
Moral decision won’t help you then

Good deeds didn’t prepare you for this
Innocence gone, give it one last kiss
The righteous path won’t pull you though
Sometimes the right thing’s the wrong thing to do
The dark side it sucks you in
Innocence lost, the ultimate sin
The path of light won’t pull you though
Sometimes the right thing’s the wrong thing to do

Sometimes the right thing’s the wrong thing to do
Sometimes the right thing’s the wrong thing to do
Sometimes the right thing’s the wrong thing to do
Sometimes the right thing’s the wrong thing to do
Urrrghhh!
 
Thank you for transliterating that "urrrghhh". I probably wouldn't have understood that lyric otherwise! :D

The big thing that jumps out to me is that the instruments aren't in the same "space". The drums have a lot of reverb and sound like they're in a big room, but the (lead) vocals are pretty dry; they sound like they're in a much smaller room than the drums. The BG vox are better in that regard. They sound closer to the drums' space than the leads.

Otherwise, everything seems pretty well balanced.

What's your vocal range? This seems like it stays pretty low-pitch for the genre.
 
I hear what VHS is saying about the reverb, but it doesn't become a problem for me until the chorus. During the verse, it's not as obvious, in my opinion. You might just want to turn the verb down on the drums, unless, you know...Scorpions.
 
Same here on the reverb. It's more noticeable in the chorus.

The bass is kind of sterile.

The cymbals have a cheap sound - not much decay. They're really swishy too.

The guitars sound pretty good - both rhythm and lead.

Good tight playing.
 
Sounds a bit "underwater" and hollow to me. I can't pinpoint why. I think it's something with the drum's depth and the reverb.
 
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