Robus - I simply listened to the song uncritically, which is not exactly what you asked for, and enjoyed it tremendously. It has that "70's" MOR feel to me and is very listenable, well-recorded, well-mixed, and well-written. Good job. If I hear anything to add which might be helpful beyond that which the others have already offered I will offer my observation. Such a nice song and performance!!!!
The music business is a cruel and shallow money trench, a long plastic hallway where thieves and pimps run free, and good men die like dogs. There's also a negative side - Hunter S. Thompson