Lay Down Your Arms
- Thread starter Lukesteele
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rayc
retroreprobate
The bass sounds weird - is it a keyboard?
The intro vocal sounds very familiar.
In other parts your vocals are a little strained & often pitchy.
It's a very 80's sounding track.
The programmed drums need some work as as they don't have any body to them.
The guitar figure around 2mins is 1/2 ripped I'm afraid.
The spoken section would have worked a little better if it was someone different or treated in some way.
INteresting start.
I'll drop in when you tweaked it.
The intro vocal sounds very familiar.
In other parts your vocals are a little strained & often pitchy.
It's a very 80's sounding track.
The programmed drums need some work as as they don't have any body to them.
The guitar figure around 2mins is 1/2 ripped I'm afraid.
The spoken section would have worked a little better if it was someone different or treated in some way.
INteresting start.
I'll drop in when you tweaked it.
Armistice
Son of Yoda
Seeing you have it for sale, isn't it a bit late to be asking for people's opinions? I suspect you're just hit harvesting.
Seriously? The drums sound average as ray's pointed out.
Pull the bass in a bit, use better samples on your kick and snare and a less "awful Blue Oyster Cult Fire Of Unknown Origin period" cheesy 80s keyboard sound and then as a whole the song will sound better. That's what you're going for here isn't it?
You're not Eric Bloom is my other comment - this sounds too low for your range and the vocal isn't quite fitting in - mebbe EQing it and what's around it a bit would help.
And in your spoken ending the very last word has a godawful plosive on "Pray" which just shouldn't be there.
I had a listen to several of your other tunes while I was there... I'd make similar comments re. the drums on just about all of them. I suspect you don't care, however, you're living your own little dream. Good for you.
Good luck with the sales.
Seriously? The drums sound average as ray's pointed out.
Pull the bass in a bit, use better samples on your kick and snare and a less "awful Blue Oyster Cult Fire Of Unknown Origin period" cheesy 80s keyboard sound and then as a whole the song will sound better. That's what you're going for here isn't it?
You're not Eric Bloom is my other comment - this sounds too low for your range and the vocal isn't quite fitting in - mebbe EQing it and what's around it a bit would help.
And in your spoken ending the very last word has a godawful plosive on "Pray" which just shouldn't be there.
I had a listen to several of your other tunes while I was there... I'd make similar comments re. the drums on just about all of them. I suspect you don't care, however, you're living your own little dream. Good for you.
Good luck with the sales.
Lukesteele
New member
Thanks for your comments folks! When we go live all these recordings will be updated with REAL DRUMS and BASS. Stay tuned!
ido1957
9K Gold Member
The vocals are a bit pitchy - I think it's a little low for your vocal range in many places. Everything except vocals and maybe bass have a sort of tinny quality to them and they're so far back in the mix. I would try and beef up the tone on those and bring them forward and try and get everything to gel together somehow. I would have had the guitar solo way louder instead of the vocals in that spot.