I listened to the latest version you have posted. I like the song. Some nimble-fingered guitar playing in there at parts. At first I thought the song was about racing, but then I noticed you're from Indiana and realized the whole thing was a metaphor for crank!
Layman's opinion... the mix sounded great to me, nothing stood out as too loud or soft. As far as personal preferences, I tend to like to hear the kick a little more... I think you have probably the perfect amount of thump, I might want a little more attack. I also tend to like the guitar-to-snare ratio a little more in favor of guitar than you have here, but with a song like this with its stop-and-start guitar playing (there's probably a term for it... I don't know it), maybe it benefits from having the beat very clearly defined by the drums.
The Indiana/crank thing was a joke, by the way. I hate using smileys. I guess they do save time, though.